In an Instagram-DP Challenge
Origins
it was cold when we met,
or perhaps
it was the northern winds that clung
to loose threads of that blue jacket
you wore so nonchalantly.
finding me in a sea of faces
was something divined
on worn down riverbanks long ago
when living was easy, and
the price of a dance were smiles.
i still remember how my eyes fell
into valleys of your throat,
with pulse beats tapping against
the back of my brain,
rearranging
a natural order of things.
seasons have changed threefold,
language has flowed
through half suns, full moons
and days without either, as
wishes are corked in blue bottles.
i recently heard a hollywood boy
fell in love with a girl
by the shape of her neck,
then swiftly took her away
to the shore.
do you still love the water
(**Instagram taken Oct 2011, poem written shortly thereafter)
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Missed your poetry and love that one.
Thank you very much.. It’s an oldie and soon as this nano writing torture is over I’m heading back to my poetry!!!
Love the words and image!
Thank you Karen.. although let’s be honest your pictures are in a word, gorgeous!!!
Wonderful poem! Love it.
Thanks mucho Miss Lily.. appreciate your reading and kind words!
Wow! This is amazing. Love the images. Seriously, Lynne, you could write a book of poetry. You have a gift.
Lisa, I’m not sure who would buy said book but I’m working on something for the kids and grandkids.. and as always, thanks for your time and support
beautiful
Thank you so much!!
Holy Cow… I loved it… but if you read my stuff… you have gotta know… I sooo get this one! Took my breath away!
Yeah, everybody has a love poem tucked away
Thank you so much for your kind words!
You and I saw very different things in that picture.
Love your take on it!
I’m a sentimental girl GP.. You know how we think
This pic is from a spot not too far from my house and I never knew it was there !!
Beautiful and bittersweet.
Have to have “po’”, as you say, no matter the day. ~ Lily
We haven’t had any Po over here lately so now is as good a day as any..
Thank so much for stopping by !!
with pulse beats tapping against
the back of my brain,
rearranging
a natural order of things.
loved this Lynne.
Thank you so much…. I think we all know this feeling
that first stanza said it all to me. and then i read the rest, and was carried away by the mental images. beautiful!
Thank you so much Teresa!!
I seem to want to read this over and over again. You’ve captured a lovely sense of connection and broken our hearts all at once.
That has to be the best compliment I have ever received on my writing.. you saw and felt what I was conveying and for that I am so appreciative and humbled.
Big thank you!!
And I am humbled in return. Thank you for sharing your words with us.
Oh my goodness Lynne, this took my breath away. Really struck one of my heart chords here. Simply beautiful.
Thank you kindly my running friend..
That was really lovely.
Muchas Gracias
How do you do that? Capture so much in so few words? How do you take a reader along, like a warm invitation, Lynne… how do you write so well?
Susan, thank you so much however I am not a very good poet.. I write what I live(ed) and write in free form therefore if this were being graded by a teacher, I’m sure it’s a fail.
who cares what a teacher thinks!! These words flow from your heart – they are yours and that’s all that matters. They are so beautiful…
great last line and stanza! hey, where’s that email you promised?
Thanks Mike.. (insert embarrassed face here).. this weekend ..Girl-scouts honor.. How was your trip?
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Beautiful poem… Lovely story too..
Thank you so kindly!!!
Bittersweet and beautiful!
Love the entire piece…but found the close especially brilliant
excellent piece….i love..i still remember how my eyes fell
into valleys of your throat,
with pulse beats tapping against
the back of my brain,
rearranging
a natural order of things…..then the look away at the boy…and then the quick turn back to if they like the beach….very cool verse….
love the images – and the fact he took he back to the shore…lovely write…bkm